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j singh banwait
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ਤਲਾਸ਼

ਬੜਾ ਕੁਝ ਏ ਮੇਰੇ ਕੋਲ ਹੁਣ ਨਾ ਬਰਾੜ ਨਰਾਸ਼ ਏ______________

 

ਸਭ ਕੁਝ ਮਿਲ ਗਿਆ ਹਾਣਦੀਏ ਬਸ ਇੱਕ ਤੇਰੀ ਤਲਾਸ਼ ਏ.

    j singh

04 Jul 2013

sukhpal singh
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These  2 lines are very well written,.............par eh complete nahi halle,......harf halle baki haan likhan walle............is nu agge likho,..........sayaad is writing nu hor vi likhea ja sakda hai,............aap kol ehsaaas haan,.......te mainu umeed hai aap hor vi agge bohat khubb likh sakde ho,............keep it up,..............duawaan aap g lai.

18 Jul 2013

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