Har roj hi apniya socha'n nal ladaayi lag jandi hai meri.....
Oh menu nai jitan dendiya te main ohna nu.....
Kyunki jis din main jitt gyi ta meriya sochan mukk jandiya.....
Te Je soch jit gyi ta meri maut ho jani......
Har roz oh mere kol dukha da tokra Le aaundiya ne te farol farol k mere agge oh dukh kandya waang sutdiya ne.....fir Jad mera Mann ohna de upro di ho k jaan di koshish krda ta oh dokhi kande roz mere Mann nu jakhmi karde ne.....
Kyi saala to ik ik krke ohna kandya cho bahute ta main chug chug k kathe kar lye c.... Te bahutya de dard nal jeena Sikh lya c.......
Par ena bathera nai c.....Hale meri jaan nikalani baaki bachi c......
Main te aakhya c rabba hun eh dard bardasht nai hunda......Mann bht hi Jakhami ho chuka aa.....menu apne kol hi bula Le......bahute dukh te sambhaal lye aa main hun Thakk gyi aa kuch tu sambh Le......
Te dekho meri kismat rabb ne ene dil nal meri ardaas sun lyi ke menu os insaan de pyaar ch paa dita jehnu oh meri zindagi ch bhej k meri kismat ch likhna bhul gya......te ik ik karke ohna kathe kite dukha nu fer meri zindagi ch khilaar dita......
Hun fer meriya socha mere kol aaundiya ne roj......Par Os dukha de tokre ch ohdi yaad v nal Le aaundiya ne.......sab kuch oda hi aa, mann hale v jakhmi hunda aa.......
Farak sirf ehi aa k hun ohna dokhi kandya da dard mehsoos nai hunda kyunki ohdiya yaadan de Jakham kuch jada hi dunge ho gye ne......Jehna de bharan di Koi umeed nai......
Har roj hi mere andro holi holi krke meri maut hoyi jandi......
Par kite na kite dil Khush v hai k hun na ohnu apna banan da fikar aa te na hi ohnu gawaa den da darr.......
Tera shukar aa rabba lakh wari jo tu ohde nal meri rooh nu hi jod dita......
Hun te rehndi duniya tak v oh mere andro vakh nai ho skda......chahe tu v koshish kar k dekh le rabba.....
Ohde te hmesha mehar kari......
By- Navi

So real, so simple yet so complex, so personal yet so impersonal and so spontaneous flow of thoughts with a paradoxical end...ਮਤਲਬ ਦਰਦ ਦੇਣ ਵਾਲੇ ਲਈ ਰਹਿਮ ਦੀ ਦੁਆ, ਬਸ ਇਹੀ paradox ਹੈ |

Well written Navi ji. God be with you !

thank you so much jagjit g.....you are right....paradox!!!!

 

par dard te meri kismat ne dita menu ......ehde ch os rabb roop insaan da koi kasoor nai.........

je main eh v socha ki ohne dard dita...........

je kuch v galat ya bura lagge ta nasamajh soch k maaf kar dyiyo....

corrections are always welcome.....

ਨਹੀਂ ਨਵੀ ਜੀ, ਇਹ ਤਾਂ ਪ੍ਰੇਮ ਕਰਨ ਵਾਲੇ ਉਸ ਮਨ ਨੂੰ ਮੇਰੇ ਵੱਲੋਂ ਕੰਪਲੀਮੈਂਟ ਸੀ ਅਸਲ ਵਿਚ, ਜੋ ਦਰਦ ਦੇਣ ਵਾਲੇ ਲਈ ਵੀ ਖੈਰ ਮੰਗਦਾ ਏ |

 

ਇਹ ਐਸੇ ਮਨ ਦੀ ਅਵਸਥਾ ਊਚੇ ਹੋ ਜਾਣ ਦਾ ਸੂਚਕ ਹੈ, ਮੇਰੀ ਜਾਚੇ - So it was pure compliment and no correction !  

 

ਤੁਸੀ ਪੰਜਾਬੀ ਵਿਚ ਕਿਉਂ ਨਹੀਂ ਲਿਖਦੇ ?

 

ਰੱਬ ਰਾਖਾ |

ਬਹੁਤ ਧਨਵਾਦੀ ਆ ਤੁਹਾਡੀ.....ਏਨਾ ਮਾਨ ਦੇਣ ਲਯੀ ਇਹਨਾ ਸੋਚਾ ਨੂ ਤੇ ਇਸ ਕਮਲੇ ਮੰਨ ਨੂ........ਅੱਗੇ ਤੋ ਪੰਜਾਬੀ ਵਿਚ ਲਿਖਣ ਦੀ ਕੋਸ਼ਿਸ਼ ਰਹੂਂਗੀ

Dukh da tokra.... Kande.....raste ..... Zakhm ....
Sukh ..... Kismat ... Dard ... Housla .. Te duaa ...
Kinne saare ehsaas bhare ne nvi tusi apni es rachna vich ..
Amrita pritam likhdi ey: zindgi apne ghare bula ke mehman niwazi bhull gyi ..
Aida ee kyi rishte jurde ne par kismat ch nahi likhe hunde ..
Harek insaan nu apne pakhon har rishte ch apna shat prti shat yogdan pouna chahida hai ..
Duaawan 🙏

Bahut dard bhini likhat pad k mann bhar ayia apnian sochan te aapne aap naal ladayi bahut dadnaak hai.
Kande dukh kaleshan naal bhari eh zindagi vich kite b rangini nazar nahi aa je aaundi hai tan fir dobara ton dukhan da tokkra nal laike .
Dil binn dita hai navi jee tuhadian eh ve-lagaam sochan ne tan.
Waheguru mehar kare te sab sochan khushian ch tabdol ho jaaan te rabb naal b gillhe shikwe khatam ho jaan.
Jiundi reh kudiye ....

Navi ji boht khoob.apna dil da dard shabdaan vich is tarah byaan kita k paran vale de dil vich uttar jave atte bohteyaan ne taa is rachna vichon apni zindagi di jhalak vekhi hovegi .aur ik changa shayar ohi hunda jo jis ehsaas nu handave te inj kagaz te dhaal deve k sab nu lagge eh ta ohna de dil di gal c.tusi is rachna vich kuj ehi kmaal kita navi ji.

best lines---"par dil kite na kite khush v hai k na ohnu paun da fikar te na ohnu gwaun da darr"

 

shiv ne v boht khoob keha"jach menu aa gayi gam kham di

                                        Holi holi ro k jee parchaun di

                                         Changa hoya tu praya ho gayon

                                          Muk gayi chinta tenu apnauh di"

navpreet g your precious comments are most welcome. thanx for giving time to this composition