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RAJWINDER JI.......................BHUT SOHNI RACHNA HAI........................TUHADI.........................

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wow nice i like ir

I think u can write well..but eh ik sanjeeda rachna nahi aakhi ja sakdi ! No doubt its well expressed but kuj halke lafz han jinna nu avoid karna chaeeda ! Could be better ! 

shukriya g sarea nu.........@divroop g tusi shi keha hai ki ih ik sanjida rachna nhi hai te m v mandi haan ....ih lines taan bus m ne colg vich hase-majaak ch frnds ch beh k likhia c .te jithe tak shabda di gal hai ajey tak bahut kuch sikhna baki hai . jithe tusi shbda nu avoid krn di gal khi hai main sochdi haan kuch galat nhi likhia te kadi kadi kuch istra da likh dena chahida hai.

verry nic ji..

@ Divroop!!

ghazal Arabian word hai,,, te mote taur te ghazal da bhav aapne jazbaatan nu akhar dena hai,,bhave oh akhar simple hi hon.....but,could be better!!

raj g tusi bahut vadia likhde ho par ke dil nu acha laga koi ta sach bolda ha

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